This will be the comments section for my new story, so comment away! I will only continue the story if people really want me to.

Sorry for the long delay, but I've finally approved this story. Enjoy!

Thanks hopefully people will review, because I'm not sure whether I'll finish it or not. You've got to admit it's out of the ordinary hehehe I was hyper when I wrote this

Do you mind if I give you a small writer tip?

“Why are you so aggravating?!?!?!?!”

You can easily get this to flow with more meaning like this:

"Why are you so aggravating!?" Alstia shouted questioningly at him, slamming her door shut before he could reply.


You don't need to use that much punctuation to get the point across. Just a tip. Same with all of your other uses of a lot of !!!!! and such. Hope this helps.

Also I did love your story. Keep it up I think you have some good talent.

Thanks, you're right. I'm fond of punctuation hehe just kidding. It's actually far from my best work, trust me. FAR from my best writing. Right now I'm trying to write a screenplay and failing miserably.